Sjakihata
07-25-2002, 21:42
I am considering to write my own book about the sengoku jidai period. The perspectives should: politics, warfare, and culture.
It will be somewhat historical accurate concerning major events, battles etc. I will use some of the great leaders, invent new ones, and use some existed under other names.
I will write for my own amusement, expirence, and personal development.
This is the introduction:
"The sky was bright; it was a clear autumn day with a slight breeze, and a perfect day for hunting. The falcon used the upward winds to rise a little further, scouted the ground beneath for prey. On the ground the hunting party watched with excitement the falcon, looking for prey. Suddenly in some nearby bushes, there was movement. A hare was running toward the hunting party. The falcon detected the movement, almost immediately, and flew downward like a hunting arrow. It was ek ek eking and the cry filled the sky. By now the hare had realized the present danger, and was running blindly to find cover. The hunting party had moved a little, not to get in the way of the hare and falcon. The falcon was ten meters away and closing, now just above its prey. The falcon used its talons to grab the hare, and just in that instant an arrow hit the hunt master in his chest. All around the hunting party, men with bows and wakazashis appeared. However the hunt continued and the hare was caught, and killed. In the hunting party were ten samurai, as an honour guard. And they charged blindly at the enemy, and the enemy bowmen shot their arrows again. There were four bowmen, and they all hit their targets. Two hit the same attacker, the honour guard captain, the two other bowmen hit tow different targets. The captain, which was hit twice, screamed and fell to the ground, the others continued. Now the enemy counter charged, and the battle was furious. When they clashed, the attackers had an advantage with their longer swords; katanas. But when in melee the shorter wakazashis were more doable. The air was filled with battle screams, orders were shouted, but not followed. It was the pure havoc. But all fought bravely. And the enemy was winning; they were also twice as many men as the hunting party. And soon the battle ended. Twelve enemies were left, none samurai. In the hunting party, there was: the daimyo, his heir, two ladies, and one general. They were all slaughtered.
The day was more beautiful than ever, the enemy captain thought to himself, watching the falcon flew away. He, Akechi Takonuchi captain of the fourth squadron of the ronin regiment and hatamoto, had succeeded."
why I am not writeing in danish? Then the most of the dojo cannot read it http://www.totalwar.org/ubb/tongue.gif
Perhaps if it is done, I will donate it to the dojo.
Please come with some response, constructive critisism and suggestions for: plots, characters writing techniques/styles etc.
Thank you in advance
EDIT: how the hell to you spell "brize" (I mean a little wind)
EDIT: added breeze instead of brize
[This message has been edited by Sjakihata Akechi (edited 07-25-2002).]
It will be somewhat historical accurate concerning major events, battles etc. I will use some of the great leaders, invent new ones, and use some existed under other names.
I will write for my own amusement, expirence, and personal development.
This is the introduction:
"The sky was bright; it was a clear autumn day with a slight breeze, and a perfect day for hunting. The falcon used the upward winds to rise a little further, scouted the ground beneath for prey. On the ground the hunting party watched with excitement the falcon, looking for prey. Suddenly in some nearby bushes, there was movement. A hare was running toward the hunting party. The falcon detected the movement, almost immediately, and flew downward like a hunting arrow. It was ek ek eking and the cry filled the sky. By now the hare had realized the present danger, and was running blindly to find cover. The hunting party had moved a little, not to get in the way of the hare and falcon. The falcon was ten meters away and closing, now just above its prey. The falcon used its talons to grab the hare, and just in that instant an arrow hit the hunt master in his chest. All around the hunting party, men with bows and wakazashis appeared. However the hunt continued and the hare was caught, and killed. In the hunting party were ten samurai, as an honour guard. And they charged blindly at the enemy, and the enemy bowmen shot their arrows again. There were four bowmen, and they all hit their targets. Two hit the same attacker, the honour guard captain, the two other bowmen hit tow different targets. The captain, which was hit twice, screamed and fell to the ground, the others continued. Now the enemy counter charged, and the battle was furious. When they clashed, the attackers had an advantage with their longer swords; katanas. But when in melee the shorter wakazashis were more doable. The air was filled with battle screams, orders were shouted, but not followed. It was the pure havoc. But all fought bravely. And the enemy was winning; they were also twice as many men as the hunting party. And soon the battle ended. Twelve enemies were left, none samurai. In the hunting party, there was: the daimyo, his heir, two ladies, and one general. They were all slaughtered.
The day was more beautiful than ever, the enemy captain thought to himself, watching the falcon flew away. He, Akechi Takonuchi captain of the fourth squadron of the ronin regiment and hatamoto, had succeeded."
why I am not writeing in danish? Then the most of the dojo cannot read it http://www.totalwar.org/ubb/tongue.gif
Perhaps if it is done, I will donate it to the dojo.
Please come with some response, constructive critisism and suggestions for: plots, characters writing techniques/styles etc.
Thank you in advance
EDIT: how the hell to you spell "brize" (I mean a little wind)
EDIT: added breeze instead of brize
[This message has been edited by Sjakihata Akechi (edited 07-25-2002).]