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John86
04-02-2007, 02:41
I randomly wrote a few poems for no apparant reason. Here they are, tell me what you think:


Unto my hearth nature invites the soul,
The flow of the wind, my lungs,
The ripple of the water, my eyes,
The sweetness of the flower, my touch,
My senses, natures clutch,
Nature is to me, as it is to you,
The air fills my soul with life,
The water, its freedom my liberty,
Unto me the flower provides happiness,
Nature has given me birth,
And to you as well,
Oh! The delight of God’s earth
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The flower,
Its blades picked one by one,
Petal by petal,
Falling pious, in my hand it settles
My fingers, their presence blessed,
Oh! The beauty my soul has now possessed,
All because of one petal,
Falling to rest
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Sun!
O! Sun! Shining from above, natures light
O! Sun! The night has not yet arrived,
Remain independent; express your beauty unto us still!
Is your grace, so apparent to those of sight,
Not also apparent to those blind likewise?
The trade winds existence, unknown to color, remain constant,
Not so with you, Oh dear Sun!
Your color soars! Your brightness, it thrills me!
O! Sun! Tranquil aloof my Soul,
Your presence, striking value unto the hills,
O! Sun! Your life, it fills me!
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Nature is my House of Worship,
My Altar, upon it lays the breeze of wind,
The push of currents, the splash of ripples,
To Thee, I praise!
To Thee, I sing!
Born of Nature’s soil,
I, now still young of age,
Find His greater existence among all entities,
For if God does not exist in the petals of a flower,
The sweet melody of the bird, the thrill of the sun,
Then God has no existence at all!
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Two trees sitting piously,
Branches, awkwardly extending, reach unto me,
My hands, now held awry,
Open unto the sky, accepting the earthly fruit,
O! God’s gift upon me,
The fiddle, the flute,
They hath no sovereign able to replicate this sweet produce!
Nature has blessed the land,
Nature has blessed me likewise,
Nature has given fruit, now held firmly in my hand!
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Sitting upon a stump gazing unto powered skies,
My attention drawn downwards to the river,
The powered skies persist!
Nature’s mirror has reflected its beauty,
Beauty! O! Soul! Beauty!
Unrestricted, my earthly figure floats delicately upon the water,
Faster! O! Current! Faster! Glide my form, but forget not my soul!
The soul, not forgotten, treads along close,
As I arise, cleansed of unnatural demise,
I again gaze unto the water, its reflection remains!
The powered skies strike me once more, as if seeing an old friend!
Upon their picture now lays me! Of all things!
My verse eternized, my portrait placed upon its ripples,
The reflection sent up unto the Heavens,
My existence, no longer excluded,
The companionship of Nature and Soul, never secluded!
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Free,
My blood flows restlessly,
Tuned in harmony, soul and nature
Blood seeps into my heart, pumping its wisdom,
My fingers, nimble, feel strenuously,
My mouth waters at beauties realization,
My body grows strong-mighty!
Nature nurtures me-God Almighty!
Drops of rain, waning away,
Droplets of blood, body’s buffet!
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The mathematician counting, his mind enabled,
The scientist revealing, mystery no longer fabled,
The teacher preaching, pupils gaze, minds abroad,
The preacher enlightening, his words we applaud,
Earthly professions, the mind redeems itself, importance embraced!
Yet the artists, writers, musicians sit tranquil, waiting
The mind leads blindly, unfit for stouthearted efforts,
For their task, they inquire not the mind,
But Soul and Heart, never to lead the blind!

Beirut
04-02-2007, 03:58
Hmm, some of it is very nice. There is a very interesting and comfortable cadence in several lines. A great tool to reach the reader and pull him into your words. Not easy with poetry.

naut
04-02-2007, 07:40
Some really nice imagery there, I like the use of free verse. Reminds me alot of Wordsworth, with the references to/themes regarding nature and God.

John86
04-03-2007, 04:32
Thanks for your comments.

New entry:



Hello, morning light,
Hello, hearty tree, bird perched free, upon your branches
Hello, new day’s voyage,
Hello, flower, feeding nutrients, feeding my soul,
Hello, mid-day stroll, reveal to my soul the nature hidden to the eye,
Hello, bright, thrilling daylight,
Hello, spring warmth, comfortable atmosphere,
Hello, waning sun, though, your beauty does not wan.
Hello, cool spring night,
Hello, rising moon, let not the sun’s former presence diminish your charm,
Hello, stars and constellations, the sun at rest, from you light appears solely,
Hello, dark night sky,
Hello, restful patch upon the strand, allow me to rest awhile,
Hello, Nature, your symphonic melody,
Hello, World.

Bijo
04-04-2007, 19:32
Your last entry made somewhat of an impression on me.... I dunno why. Just had something to it. But the last line came as some sort of "funny thing", 'cause it made me think of those typical programming language books :laugh4:


But it seems 'nature' has some sort of influence on you, and gives you most of the inspiration...? All of your poems seem to be about nature in a broad sense.

And you used 'Thee', hah! Nice, nice :2thumbsup:

The Stranger
04-05-2007, 14:47
This is a tribute to my past
Hommage to the old ways
Thinking back 'bout the passed days
How blind were we that we didn't see
We as lil' kids grew up on a battlefield
Where tears fell and dreams shattered
Nobody ever left this place unbattered
When the first cracks in the conrete appear
We all know what is coming
But it still hurts when all of the sudden
The wall comes crashing down
And when the dustclouds lift
To find your world collapsing around
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Identical streets marked by identical trees. Identical houses with identical people that live in it. The grass isn't greener on the other side of the fence, identical as the grass is. Identical streets that lead to identical plaza's. And on one of those identical plaza's stand I, the only non-Identical around, lost in the Identicalness of identical streets marked by identical trees. Of identical house with identical people that live in it. With identical flowers in identical gardens and in the midst of one of those identical gardens, search I, for a way out of the Identicalness of identical streets marked by identical trees. Of identical houses with identical people that live in it. It is a vicious circle I can't escape from, cause how am I ever going to find my way out. When all of the escape routes are identical and even when one is found, as identical as they are, they only lead to the same Identicalness I found myself in yesterday.
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I'm a man of thousand faces
One for every hour of the day
And upon those thousand faces
I wear a mask of pale grey
I have armour for my protection
Afraid I am to be loved
I run away from your affection
And shelter 'till the madness pass'd

John86
04-05-2007, 15:59
Thanks for taking over my thread. Fine, Group Poetry thread it is, I guess. Anyhow, nice, Stranger.

The Stranger
04-05-2007, 18:48
Hehehe, sorry Hiji. Yours are very nice too :) enjoyed reading them... And sorry for hijacking your thread, it was not intended :P

Its funny we have such different style... mines a bit rappy... most of my poems are... its called slamjam, didnt knew it was called slamjam untill i went to a slamjam fest :P