A Fox in the Desert

Is the fox still running?

(Page 2 of 2! Woohoo!)

Apep

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Good to see the story is still running! Go on!!:yes:

After

2 small comments first off while the idea of the trick party of guards is great. However the deal with terminatorix falls somewhere between cute and bleh. If you rename him and maybe reduce the reputation the gladiator idea works well especially if you give him a renown patron. I would presume from the story of the young fox, that ceasar owes marcus a favor so that might work.

overall though very good job please keep goin

Thanks! The trick with two details just came to me yesterday. Glad that you liked it. I like taking chances, so maybe Terminatorix will work out. Some of the other character names are cliches too. Apep was an evil demon's name. Even the pirate king's name is stolen from Alexander the Great. Supposedly on Alexander's deathbed, his generals asked him, "Who among us shall lead your empire?" Alexander's response was, "Kratisto!" (Greek for "the strongest")

Miles

classy in the best of ways

Thanks! You're an excellent judge of style.

The

Miles

“Sutekh!”

Miles

Go on, go on!

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Still like the story and cannot wait to see how it will go on! :book:

Thanks! It's always fun writing for my alter-ego.

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Just read the first section, fantastic work here.

Both amusing and tragic, highly Flemingesque (in a good way).

Great! Glad that you liked it. It's about 60 pages of MS Word text, so I hope that you don't get tired of my alter ego.

Do not worry! Just continue!!:2thumbsup:

Read everything so far. Must have more! :thumbsup:

(Thanks!)

Miles .

Miles

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