Need some imput...

**Beefy187** · 02-09-2009, 02:10

Alright.. Umm...

I've been writing about a story of epic mosquitoes. And heres what happened.

Basic plot is that there is this tribe of mosquitoes which is suffering from diseases. And one guys (Bob for now) wife and children gets the disease and they are about to die. When Bob goes outside the hospital, he meets the witches and are told that blood of God is the only way to cure the sickness. So him and few other brave men goes out to the house of God (Humans) and attempts to take their blood but they get killed.

The readers doesn't get told the characters in the story are actually a mosquito.

So I got to the part with the witches and realized something fatal. Went on to Wikipedia and found out that only female mosquitoes sucks human blood as they are the best source of energy before they give birth and they will not die if they don't get blood.

Male mosquitoes normally gets their energy from plants juice and honey etc. They have nothing to do with human blood. In fact, they are poor creatures as they get brutally killed by humans anyway and they even get avoided by females around the time when they give birth.

If you know the noise machines which keeps the mosquitoes away, they use the noise of male mosquitoes because they are the most hated sound of the female mosquito.

I went off topic a bit. But the thing is.. If the male mosquitoes doesn't suck blood and female mosquito doesn't need blood to survive, this whole concept of the narrative fails and collapses.

So I humbly asks for my fellow Orgahs help. Is there any ideas how this mosquito story could work?

Cheers

**seireikhaan** · 02-09-2009, 02:14

Originally Posted by 187Beefyz

etc....

So I humbly asks for my fellow Orgahs help. Is there any ideas how this mosquito story could work?

Cheers

Quite simple, really. Its just a story, no? If its just a story, then FIB. Who cares whether its just female mosquitos who suck blood? I cannot think of the number of stories I've heard(bearing in mind, movies are just stories played out) where fact is ignored in the pursuit of a good story.

**Monk** · 02-09-2009, 02:24

Originally Posted by seireikhaan

Quite simple, really. Its just a story, no? If its just a story, then FIB. Who cares whether its just female mosquitos who suck blood? I cannot think of the number of stories I've heard(bearing in mind, movies are just stories played out) where fact is ignored in the pursuit of a good story.

This.

Because you're the author it is your realm to nitpick about these things, but I can promise you the average reader likely has no idea that is the case. If you have a compelling story then no one will care.

**woad&fangs** · 02-09-2009, 02:25

The children are sick and the blood is needed to cure them. The symbolism is still there and easily accessible. Cool story idea by the way! Any chance we'll get to see it in the mead hall any time soon?

**Beefy187** · 02-09-2009, 02:29

Originally Posted by woad&fangs

The children are sick and the blood is needed to cure them. The symbolism is still there and easily accessible. Cool story idea by the way! Any chance we'll get to see it in the mead hall any time soon?

Writing in Japanese as I am trying to learn some Kanji (Chinese characters) after 7 years of English in Australia.

However, while its going to be full of grammatical and spelling errors, ill still give it a go

Just need to hand write it first then ill translate it when i'm done.

Thank you for your advice Khaan and Monk

That is too true. Ill ignore the facts and stick to what I originally planned. Cheers

**Tratorix** · 02-09-2009, 02:35

That is too true. Ill ignore the facts and stick to what I originally planned. Cheers

That what Dan Brown does and now he's a millionaire.

**Beefy187** · 02-09-2009, 03:30

Originally Posted by Tratorix

That what Dan Brown does and now he's a millionaire.

That is soo true

I reckon Angel and demon is a master piece though

**Uesugi Kenshin** · 02-09-2009, 04:55

You could always try substituting ticks or some other nasty critter for mosquitoes, I don't know if that will affect your grammar as I have no knowledge of Japanese grammar, but it's worth thinking about.

**Beefy187** · 02-09-2009, 07:14

Originally Posted by Uesugi Kenshin

You could always try substituting ticks or some other nasty critter for mosquitoes, I don't know if that will affect your grammar as I have no knowledge of Japanese grammar, but it's worth thinking about.

Grammatically it doesn't affect it. However I have more knowledge and love for the mosquitoes while I only have bitter memories for ticks..

I have half the story in English done. Ill do the other half sometime today or tomorrow

Thanks for the advice Kenshin dono

**Somebody Else** · 02-09-2009, 10:19

Make it Jane's husband and children who are ill, and she has to go off and do whatever...

**Beefy187** · 02-09-2009, 11:53

Originally Posted by Somebody Else

Make it Jane's husband and children who are ill, and she has to go off and do whatever...

I thought of that, except male mossys never drinks blood (maybe they do but only for fun) normally they live on other vegetablish things.

Only female mossys drinks blood as with blood they are able to produce about ten times more eggs compared to when they dont have blood. so its not life or death.

**pevergreen** · 02-10-2009, 03:10

Make it Jane is infertile and decides to get the blood of a god (or whatever it was) as a cure so she can deliver children to her husband? She could also be of a "high standing" like a princess or something in human terms. Don't think that would relate, but it makes more scientific sense?

**Beefy187** · 02-10-2009, 04:08

Originally Posted by pevergreen

Make it Jane is infertile and decides to get the blood of a god (or whatever it was) as a cure so she can deliver children to her husband? She could also be of a "high standing" like a princess or something in human terms. Don't think that would relate, but it makes more scientific sense?

That could work actually.. I might write a different version of the story.

Cheers Pever