If you can get the narration to be very good, then you have it done!
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If you can get the narration to be very good, then you have it done!
Names, secret names
But never in my favour
But when all is said and done
It's you I love
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Nice intro.
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If you are going for the 'god' narrative (being the observer)I would go for " As the silver-haired man addressed the audience, their gazes focused on him" Think John Hurt telling the story with that awesome deep voice.
Last edited by Fragony; 03-28-2009 at 08:03.
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Nice work, looking forward to the rest of it.
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actually, only the fist chapter is 3rd person. the rest is being narrated solely by Alexandre. the first chapter is narrated is narrated by a cameraman, just saying what was happening.Originally Posted by Fragony
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You should know about these sites; you might be able to upload other stories there.
http://www.fanfiction.net/
http://www.storyteller.net/
http://www.novelmaker.com/index/
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Good stuff so far
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Nice introduction. Looking forward to more!
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The poorest man may in his cottage bid defiance to all the forces of the Crown. It may be frail; its roof may shake; the wind may blow through it; the storm may enter; the rain may enter; but the King of England cannot enter – all his force dares not cross the threshold of the ruined tenement! - William Pitt the Elder
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