My story.

[A Nerd]

The time you spent on it really shows! Highly entertaining! :)

[Marshall Louis-Nicolas Davout]

thanks.

[Kahotep]

Sorry, Takeda, but I found myself distracted by your punctuation errors. Take this line for example:

The Takeda troops walked throught the castle gates,others were climbing and the archers were forming up.The Anegagkojii were asleep,their force not awake.Yuishe raised the banner.The Archers fired flaming arrrows.The Castle of Anegagkojii became lit with fire!The Takeda troops advanced slowly.

There should be a space after each punctuation mark (commas, periods, and exclamation marks). Here's what it should look like:

The Takeda troops walked throught the castle gates,others were climbing and the archers were forming up. The Anegagkojii were asleep, their force not awake. Yuishe raised the banner. The Archers fired flaming arrrows. The Castle of Anegagkojii became lit with fire! The Takeda troops advanced slowly.

You should also vary your sentence structure more. Right now you have a bunch of simple sentences, which makes for monotonous reading, so I recommend you combine some (but not all) of your sentences into compound or complex sentences. This might be helpful:

http://www.eslbee.com/sentences.htm

[Marshall Louis-Nicolas Davout]

Thanks.

[Marshall Louis-Nicolas Davout]

''The Ishida army will be mostly made of up Onna Bushin.Which generals is a very nice thing''.The Generals laughed.''To fight female Samurai is even more better!''.Everyone laughed again.''Now the army is to be in a L -shaped formation.The Calvary will be the L side''.Takeda nodded to the servant.The Servant quickly set up the red blocks on the battle table.There were 2 triangle red blocks indicating the cavalry.Then there were 5 more blocks of Samurai in front of the Calvary.Next to them were ten blocks of Yari Ashaguri and 5 blocks of bow Ashaguri in front of the Yari Ashaguri.



Next to the red army on the battle plan were the black blocks indicating the Ishida Clan.



''Generals.Our Samurai shall engage first''.The servant moved two blocks of samurai.He did the same with the Ishida forces.''Then I want our samurai to break when they lose''.Everyone looked at him.''Do not worry you will see why''.Takeda pointed to the 5 blocks of the Takeda bow Ashaguri.''They will need to be hit first by the Ishida archers,we'll be doing this for a while.Then we should send our cavarly on both sides to attack the hidden archers from the back, when the enemy feel they have done enough.They will send their main force.The battle will go easily in our favour once our cavlary has done their work''.



''Ishida,I would like it you just watched the battle''.Ishdia nodded.''Now lets get out of here and to battle''.Takeda muttered

[A Nerd]

The calm before the storm it would seem, yes? :)

[Marshall Louis-Nicolas Davout]

what do you mean?