Proofreading

[bovi]

Thanks for this. I agree with most of your changes so far, it becomes more readable this way. It is perhaps still harder to read than necessary, better punctuation and splitting into more paragraphs may be the ticket. Some sentences contain a huge amount of sub-sentences!

Note that you won't need to mark each change, if it costs you any significant time to do so. When we paste it over the existing description, we can see the changes highlighted automatically with the diff tool before committing the change to the build.

About the trust thing, I'd reword it to something like this:

They are a people rich in courage. They may not cover themselves in iron mail or bronze helmets, but their spears and swords will still kill any man, driven home by their sinewy limbs and wild hearts.