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Quote[/b] (TheSilverKnight @ Jan. 09 2004,13:25)]anyone?? please read and review
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What kind of review do you want? If you want the quick type then your idea is good and has potential but a little more polish would go a long way, for example Francois was born in 1206, after much struggle by his wife to produce an heir. has an effect because it sounds like Francois own wife gave birth to him I think you meant 'mother' not 'wife' there A read though or two with the aim of polishing your work would remove eye popping errors like that and leave the reader free to sit back end enjoy the tale.

If you mean a more in-depth review going over the story point by point, giving advice on where to alter things etc I am not nearly qualified to give advice like that, but someone here may be.

You know that almost sounded like a halfway decent comment, there must have been something in that tea I just drank