The problem is the story seems to be lacking a theme. Some kind of quest to complete or a great danger to face. Just describing the battles, as you mainly did in the preview, does not make a story. You should make the theme more obvious. Explain to the readers what Edward's motivation is, and things like that.

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Quote[/b] ]It is still mostly ideas.
A story usually starts that way. Only when you work on it, it grows. Good luck with writing