Nice story Monk.

Your style seems very, for want of a better description, 'Tolkienesque'. For example:
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Quote[/b] ]The sun had risen in the morning sky, yet it found itself blocked from view as a dense fog settled in over the land of Muscovy. The light of the world, though great, could not burn it's way through the thick clouds and mist that tumbled onto the land ever so often in this part of the earth.
Sounds much like a Tolkien description, very mystical and mysterious. Cool writing style, man.

The plot was also excellent. Many people have done Mongol invasion stories, but this is a very good one.