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Quote[/b] (nightcrawlerblue @ July 12 2004,21:45)]*tosses story out of a window for fear of being attacked by Ludens*
I inspire fear? Boy, the guys at the university are never going to believe this

It's good, but halfway in the story you switched from the he-(Jalor)-form to the I-form. It's a bit confusing.