AntiochusIII: As an American i don't feel offended by that, as i'm sure it was directed at my people. We are the only ones (to my knowledge) that constantly call ourselves patriots, kinda gets annoying sometimes. And the "Obese-Protection act" nice touch...

[harmless joke] but under The Patriot act i feel i can say no more...i think i'm already being monitored for speaking out [/harmless joke]

Emperor Umeu 1: i've already commented on the skull bridge story, so i'll say something on the Rotterdam. I meant to reply to your other thread...dunno why i did

I know it's a short story but it seems...too short. I think it was perhaps lacking details. Why were men willing to follow Alexander? (for example) why was he leading them away from the romans and not to battle against them? did he think the battle was lost? basic plot questions like this should be explained.

Don't worry about length, try to expand on your ideas. Even if it ends up as 2 or 3 pages. Try to develope the characters a bit, or if you are doing a narrative try to explain the situation in a way that makes you care about them. (just some tips)


Uesugi Kenshin: Quietus beat me to it. i think i agree...