post your poems

**master of the puppets** · 04-21-2005, 13:30

very good emperor, heres my poem/signiture you tell me whether its good or not

master of puppets i'm pulling your strings
twisting your mind and smashing your dreams
blinded by me you can't see a thing
just call out master i'l hear you scream
your hybrid children watch the sea
pray for father bound by me
victim of what i said should be
now you're mine
running blind threw killing feilds
bred to kill them all
one more purpose left to serve
serve me till you fall
lashing out the action, returning the reaction
weak are ripped and torn away
hypnotising power, crushing all that cower
with your heart and soul i play

GIVE UP HOPE ALL HE WHO ENTERS HERE

ask not for whom the bell tolls, it tolls for thee

**The Stranger** · 04-21-2005, 16:07

it's good i like it. it's funny, but also a bit ironic

**The Stranger** · 04-21-2005, 19:14

here's a new one (not mine though)

if i'm lying in the sun i'm black
if you're lying in the sun you're brown

if i get mad i'm black
if you get you're red

if i'm sick i'm black
if you're sick you're yellow

if i'm cold i'm black
if you're cold you're blue

if i'm warm i'm black
if you're warm red

if i'm dead i'm black
if you're dead you're white

and you call me coloured

**Monk** · 04-21-2005, 21:28

Correct me if I'm wrong master of the puppets, but your signature/poem seems have a large part of it made up from lyrics in Metallica songs. It feels disjointed when read, some of the ideas expressed don't seem to go together and do not support one another. you should try to connect them in a better way... maybe it's because it's hard for me to read them without thinking about their individual songs.

just my .02

**The Stranger** · 04-22-2005, 12:53

i think it's great though look for some spell errors

**master of the puppets** · 04-22-2005, 22:04

exactly monk, i was hoping someone figured that out eventually.

Metallica is the best band ever!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
and master of the puppets is the best album.

**Uesugi Kenshin** · 04-23-2005, 03:49

I recognize the last bit, Give up Hope all ye who enter here is from Dante. I can't write/don't like to write poems, so I will continue with my tiny stories.