Edyz, I like your stories. The grammar is a little off in some areas but easily fixed, so it’s no big deal. The part of the story that I would like to see you spend more time on is the "setting the stage" part. You do a nice job describing some of the people, I would like to see the same effort put into describing the era, political climate, land, mood of the people, etc. I don’t know very much about the area/time period and more insight would make me feel more like a part of what I was reading. It also goes for your "The Fall of Constantinople" story, which I also enjoyed reading so far.

I wouldn’t try to cram a description of everything into a paragraph in the beginning of the chapter but where it may come naturally. Maybe when an emissary returns he updates the status of the ___. Or it is narrated that he traveled thru ___ where ___ happens all the time.

You do mention things like "Summer 1279" but take it to the next level (without sounding like a dry historian of course). Turn it into a paragraph with a little info, rain after weeks of beautiful weather, the people’s confidence in the outcome of the coming battle, we completed the building of a ___, the son of our finest metal smith has begun apprenticing with his father and are making fantastic new armor for our knights, etc.

Also, maybe ramp up a sub plot; you have some but none that appear to have any continued significance. Emissary leaves, emissary returns with a letter, bla. I wouldn’t turn it into a soap opera but there is definitely room to expand the drama from the political triangle the pope is playing. In the Constantinople story there is a thing with the Viziers going on and that’s good as long as it is going some where/will be an event of meaning in the story later. I really like a story element that starts out small early and twists into a critical element later.

Well, that’s my 2 cents.
I look forward to the next chapters!
Thanks for a fun read.