Yeah, I kinda do Ludens.
First 2 chapters rewritten and revised.
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Yeah, I kinda do Ludens.
First 2 chapters rewritten and revised.
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Is it coming?
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Next chapter in the making.
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Ok Thanks!
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Guys, I am for the moment in vacation, plus I have a lack of inspiration momentarily. So the next chapter would come out later than expected. Sorry.
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Inspiration has come back, and the pen is flowing. Progress is going well with the new chapter.
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Its a very interesting story but i dont know how historically correct!it is true that the byzantines called them selves Romans or Greeks and the empire Roman.the term byzantine empire came much after.but 1 have 1 question.who is Basileos Manuel?maybe the name is not correct.Basileos is the title or a name?if is the title King,in greek is Basileus not Basileos.And the last emperor's name was Konstantinos Paleologos because the name Konstantine is english.also the name manuel is english.in greek is Emanuil Paleologos.i cant say that you made a very good effort but your knowledge in the greek language is little and cant justify some mistakes you made.when you call 1 person(like the king)you dont say<<Basileus it is my duty to...>>because in that form the right 1 is Basileu without the s.but you will say whats the problem for some little mistakes and 1 s.the problem is that if you want to use the language and writte a novel in it you have to be capable of doing it.sorry for my long post and thank you very much
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Why don't you do the same and start learn how to write English. The point with stories is that they are not documentaries, they don't have to be historical correct. Besides that everybody makes mistakes as your post proves. If you just kindly pointed him at his "mistakes" your post would have been a whole lot nicer. I can't say you made much effort of your post and also I personally think the story is great.
Add to that, that the story is written in english. Helen of Troy is indeed Helena, but everybody in England and probably most people around the globe knows who is meant. So if you write a story in English you can alter some of those historical names to the English version.
BTW, your post actually doesnt makes much sense.
Sorry for my long post and thank you very much.
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The Stranger, I think Basilios II Voulgaroktonos just wanted to help. English may not be his first language, so he may not have realized how aggresive his post sounded.
Otherwise, I agree. If the story is written in English, then why shouldn't English forms be used?
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Well, if his post wasn't meant offensive, I apologize.
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Agreed. It written in English.. It has to be anyhow, since every here speaks English, no matter where you live at.
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Has this story been abandoned? I would like to know how it is going to end.
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Ooops, I forgooot.
I'll try to post a new chapter this weekend.
@Basilios II
Well, Manuel. Think of it. Who is Manuel Palaiologos... Duuh, it's at the start, before the death of Konstantinos Palaiologos.
Second, I know it's Basileus very well, but I wanted Basileos to sound more special.
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Sorry for the overhaul. I PROMISE I will post something this week.
I'm working on another novel too, and that's why.
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Chapter XIII - Besieged
Work in progress.
Thank you for your understanding.
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Glad to see you are not abandoning this.
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Hehe.
Working on the next one, and on another novel.
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Any comments or feedback on my latest chapter?
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Sweet!!Originally Posted by edyzmedieval
RIP Tosa, I can't believe you are gone, but we will never forget you
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It's a bit too short to make any substantial comments.
(I seem to be saying this a lot, lately)
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I see some progress. However edyz you have much to improve in your story in order to make it really good one. But I think it's the details that are the main problem. Your story should be extended. Write!
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I am writing.
No nominations though...
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My fans, I have not abandoned the novel.
I just wanted to announce you this.
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Good to know. It's a rather nice novel.
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Thanks. I had other stuff to attend to, so I couldn't do too much. Anyhow, the next chapter is half finished. I have vacation this week, so basically 2 chapters should be in store hopefully.
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Chapter XIV - World
Work in progress.
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A Painted Shield of Honour - 1313. Templar Knights in France are in grave danger. Can they be saved?
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No, I liked it. Very well. Go on!
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Just a quick update and a small announcement.
The new chapters (2) will come up shortly, hopefully this weekend.
And also, I have prepared a 5 chapter galore to be published on the 29th of May, as a comemoration of the 554th year since Constantinople fell to the turks.
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Chapter XV
Work in progress.
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