In order to avoid the confusion later on, all chapters from 6 to 15 have been cut out as the plot is completely different and much more interesting after the complete rework.
Thank you for your understanding.
Re: Fall of Constantinople
In order to avoid the confusion later on, all chapters from 6 to 15 have been cut out as the plot is completely different and much more interesting after the complete rework.
Thank you for your understanding.
Ja mata, TosaInu. You will forever be remembered.
Proud
Been to:
Swords Made of Letters - 1938. The war is looming in France - and Alexandre Reythier does not have much time left to protect his country. A novel set before the war.
A Painted Shield of Honour - 1313. Templar Knights in France are in grave danger. Can they be saved?
Re: Fall of Constantinople
It seems you are working on a certain plot but I will wait for it to develop. Just like you, the dialogue is part of my weak points but as an inexperinced reader I can give you some tips. Whilst reading for the dance between Alexius and Theodora, I wondered what kind of dance was it. Folk dance (less likely), Byzantine court dance or one of the fashionable Western dances that entered in the Empire through the Italian merchants. Maybe some research on the topic can make the dialogue and the whole scene really intriguing.
Last edited by Prince Cobra; 08-28-2009 at 21:13.
R.I.P. Tosa...
Re: Fall of Constantinople
To those who have read my story so far...
I apologise for the delay, school has started and I am in my last year, and it is taking it's toll. Please bear with me.
Thank you.
P.S: Feedback much appreciated! Please comment!!
Ja mata, TosaInu. You will forever be remembered.
Proud
Been to:
Swords Made of Letters - 1938. The war is looming in France - and Alexandre Reythier does not have much time left to protect his country. A novel set before the war.
A Painted Shield of Honour - 1313. Templar Knights in France are in grave danger. Can they be saved?
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