Kagemusha's Short stories

[Monk]

Personal, emotional, i like it kagemusha.

there are some grammar errors here and there, but nothing that can't be fixed by a once over edit. A tip, when you use a punctuation mark like a ',' you should use a space aferward. Example:

The Monk thought for a long time before any resonable comment revealed itself. Yet when it did, he posted quickly.

Other than that i enjoyed this. Welcome to the Mead Hall. kagemusha

[Kagemusha]

Personal, emotional, i like it kagemusha.

there are some grammar errors here and there, but nothing that can't be fixed by a once over edit. A tip, when you use a punctuation mark like a ',' you should use a space aferward. Example:

The Monk thought for a long time before any resonable comment revealed itself. Yet when it did, he posted quickly.

Other than that i enjoyed this. Welcome to the Mead Hall. kagemusha

Thanks for the tips Monk, It clearly shows that english isnt my native language. Back at school, i was always criticized for my grammar. When i start to write something it just bursts out of my brain.

[master of the puppets]

When i start to write something it just bursts out of my brain.

so true
anyway, awsome peice, i like the lack of spaces gives it a very fast feeling, as if running with the story. love it.

[Kagemusha]

Thank you for your kind words Master Of The Puppets.