People in the Mead Hall are shy, they don't like to leave their shadows to comment very often. Do not take a offense as it is nothing against you or your story. We all must beg for comments once in a while .

Anyway, i thought it was a nice, short read. Though you still have many grammical and spelling errors. The .org here has a spellcheck, the button resides down by the "Preview post" button. You should use it to edit your story before posting, it will help.