Quote Originally Posted by Monk
Basically it comes down to overexplaining. When you have a dialogue heavy text you really dont need to explain how they talk after each line since you can do that better with the words that they use. People who are not used to this style sometimes burn themselves by trying to explain each line in great detail, losing the momentum of the story and fragmenting their piece.
ah, ok. thanks for the info. i hope i wasn't too guilty of that offence.


editing note: added a missing period to the story.