The Stranger's Journey

**The Stranger** · 08-14-2005, 13:12

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**The Stranger** · 08-16-2005, 17:04

and??? the meadhall died with him

**Monk** · 08-17-2005, 22:51

The mead hall isn't dead, its just quiet now. I've been busy lately and haven't been able to comment as i would like.

Emperor Umeu 1, imho i think the area you need to work on is connecting your ideas. Your scene transitions need some work and more detail in them to help the reader get a better picture of what is going on. That's just imho.

Though i think you have a good tale here, just with a few minor things to work on.

**The Stranger** · 08-18-2005, 13:36

yeah i know that, that's my main thing i have to work on i think. it's in all my stories.
thanx. but i dont think i'll be writing stories here anymore for atleast 5 months, cuz i lost my edit buton.

and no offence, it was more to keep the story from going off page one.

**The Stranger** · 08-18-2005, 13:42

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**yesdachi** · 08-24-2005, 20:44

Originally Posted by The Stranger

yeah i know that, that's my main thing i have to work on i think. it's in all my stories.
thanx. but i dont think i'll be writing stories here anymore for atleast 5 months, cuz i lost my edit buton.

and no offence, it was more to keep the story from going off page one.

couldent you just write it in word and then past it in after you have made your edits?