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    oh damn I love so lot the 0 comments I got! YEAHHHHHHH!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Greek Phalanx
    oh damn I love so lot the 0 comments I got!
    Sorry, but you gave me an awfull lot of text to digest.

    I am very impressed by the amount of background you provide: this story could become an epic. Unfortunatly, I think you are a bit too much focused on background and not on a fluent story. You stop in the middle of a battle to explain a Suldurian weapon in detail, but introduce the characters in an offhand way.

    But I do look forward to reading more about this war. Please continue .
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