Kingdom of Love

**Mouzafphaerre** · 02-15-2006, 02:34

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Cong's on your seniorship Duth Guy!

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**Leonin Khan** · 02-15-2006, 13:45

congratz 2...i still dont know how it works??? can somebody explain

**Alexanderofmacedon** · 02-18-2006, 04:57

And the imfamous AoM is here!

Haha, this is a funny story. The Stranger had written a poem I read in an old thread. It was a love poem and I don't know why, but I like love poetry. Go figure. Anyway, I got together with him over PM's to write some more stuff. Basically he gave me some base poems, and I fancied them up, corrected them, etc.

I have a new love poem I've rescently made:

I wish I could be with you
I wish I could just hear your voice
Hear your soft, wonderful, sweet voice
I wish I could hear it forever and a day
I wish I could hold you
I just wish you were here
I want you here
I want you with me
Forever and ever
The feeling I feel when I hear your voice
It has no words this feeling
But I want to keep it forever

For the record...

SFTS is my guy...

LMAO

**Leonin Khan** · 02-21-2006, 11:40

alright...i dont want you anyway :P

**Alexanderofmacedon** · 02-24-2006, 05:10

Good poem?

**Leonin Khan** · 02-25-2006, 20:58

to be honest...i dont really

i did like your first..but compared to that this one is quite bad

the other was great...this is below average....but thats my opinion

i dont like the fact that you use I so much in the begining without real structure...say I in the beginning of every sentence or one with I and one without I or use it spare

it would do ass a speech...its a good speech but not really a poem...but what do other members think?