Quote Originally Posted by Franconicus
Can you give me some advices? How is the balance between history and story, myth and reality. Is there enough suspense now. Enough sex and crime?

How did you like the romantic chapter?
I still like it. I initially thought you had not decided on the kind of story you wanted it to be, as it started as a history, then switched to an ordinary story, and then a sort of eye-witness account, but now you seem to have settled it. Pace is good so far, and there is indeed a suspense about what may happen. Not much, as the main character seems somewhat distant to the tale, but enough. As for the balance, I think it is fine, though the sex and crime part could be extended a little bit.