Thank you. Ill admit that it starts off well but starts to stumble a bit as it gets towards the end. There are three or four lines in there that i am particularly proud of.

My writing is indeed mostly influenced by pre-twentieth century writers. James Joyce foremost among those as well as William Faulkner (though he was early 1900s) but there are also hints of Walt Whitman (although not so much in piece like this) and Shakespeare and even a bit of Dante. Joyce and Faulkner were both masters of description and imagery and rather demigods among men. At least in my opinion.

I would like to go back and change some things. Most especially the ending. I was planning to have another paragraph detailing the falling apart of the ship but general fatigue got the better of me. Maybe i will at some point but my time is limited. Oh well.

Regardless im glad you liked it.