Night Shift

[SwordsMaster]

I am afraid that I don't really get this story. I take it you are trying to describe an experience, but I know even less about what is going on than Larry. Maybe it is because I am drowsy, but especially in the middle part (after Stuart entered) I had trouble following what happened. Also, who is Larry? It sounds like he is a police officer, but nobody is mentioning ranks. Perhaps he is an ordinary security officer, but then what is he guarding that is so big it requires patrols?
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You see, if I give too many details it will become obvious where is the action taking place, which is bad for my boss's business. So I can't tell. Larry is just a security officer, that much I can tell.

So, I don't like this story because it is too vague. I suppose it was your intention to make it appear surreal, but instead of wondering what happened to the bleeding man or why Stuart is so cool, I am busy trying figure out what is actually happening to Larry. This is a pity, becuase the situation certainly has potential.

Welcome back, BTW .

Thanks!

It is just a dramatised account of the events that happened a few days ago during the night.

[Vladimir]

I think it was pretty good. A little vague on the falling out of bed part (what should you expect?, the guy was ready to pass out) but I like the description of the real life event. It's good to see people's real life reactions to situations like this and it was illustrated well. I'm not too impressed with the guard's response but it was a good, if not gruesome, read.