Addie Historical High

[Del Arroyo]

So what's the rub? The basic premise? Kind, unorthodox high-school science teacher falsely accused by violent, bad-ass she-thug who probably had it coming anyway? What's the message? Watch out for girly gangstas?

I can tell you that the first thing some people may say when they read the passage with the girl-fight and the shenay-nay dialogue is-- "stereotype". You have to adequately describe and explain Tysha, or otherwise people will not believe your character and will not believe your story. And if she is going to be an un-sympathetic character, you must justify this through character development.

I can tell you that the fight scene, as our first introduction to Tysha, is very abrupt and extreme, and for me it does not pass the smell test. (Why did all this happen? Was it really just because the kid looked at her wrong? Are there really people like this? Wow, Tysha is small but fiesty, a real bad-ass... but so cruel. Waaiit, can this be true?) These are the thoughts that run through my head when I read that passage.

Otherwise, there are parts of the story that I like, and I'll take the positive comments from other posters as evidence that it is achieving some of its intended effect.