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    Default Compilation of Poetry

    Firstly this is an allusion to Louis MacNeice - "Prayer before Birth"
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    Default Re: Compilation of Poetry

    I thought I'd add this I'm working on, although not finished I'd like feedback.
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    And hold that everything depends upon having the “right” religion.
    But when one really knows, one has no need of religion. - Mahavyuha Sutra

    Freedom necessarily involves risk. - Alan Watts

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    Poetry is not exactly my cup of tea, so I'll skip the comments and just say:

    good job.
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    Default Re: Compilation of Poetry

    i will comment poetry then :P

    I am not yet born; console me.
    For I
    Am tearful like the weeping willow tree.
    Who’s sap bleeds profusely.


    the For I part should move to the next line and the empty spot should be replaced with something else. It disrupts the rythem

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    Essence of Black Magic is the Best in your first post

    but i did not liked Ravens, i dont know why... it just does not appeals to me.

    I like your writhing style, did you developed it yourself or you used other writers as example? I mean not stealing anything but just the way they write, i do that with stories too...

    I will post poems later too if i have time
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    Quote Originally Posted by The Stranger
    I am not yet born; console me.
    For I
    Am tearful like the weeping willow tree.
    Who’s sap bleeds profusely.


    the For I part should move to the next line and the empty spot should be replaced with something else. It disrupts the rythem
    Its meant to, its enjambment,

    Quote Originally Posted by The Stranger
    I like your writing style, did you developed it yourself or you used other writers as example?
    No thats just the way i write poetry, of course certain things have influences (like Dante's Divine Comedy for example) but I just write this way.

    Quote Originally Posted by The Stranger
    I will post poems later too if i have time
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    And hold that everything depends upon having the “right” religion.
    But when one really knows, one has no need of religion. - Mahavyuha Sutra

    Freedom necessarily involves risk. - Alan Watts

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    enjabement? anyway i dont like it :P Well you have a very good writingstyle, yeah i meant that, influences :P

    i will go to greece today, ill prolly write a big pile of stories and poems, ill post it all after i come back, see yall in a week

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