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    Default Re: 0.8 Building Description and Text Errors/Edits

    Lusotannan - Orb's spellchecking

    Treonos Dagda =

    "Dagda, like in other parts of the Pan-Celtic world..." - not sure if it's an actual error, but it's more usual to use 'as' instead of 'like' in this context.
    "He is the creator of the world, which he shapped with his warhammer and poured out everything from it's cup."

    Should be "shaped", not "shapped", and the "it's" is probably meant to be "his" (even if not, then the "it's" shouldn't have an apostrophe.)
    "It's name means literally, Good God." - again, probably should be "his name", and if not, shouldn't have the apostrophe.

    Fanum Vacuuum Endovelicus

    "he was a healing god, a protectector and simultaneously an underworld deity, from where he seemed to get his knowledge from."

    Should be "protector", not "protectector", and the last section should be altered to: "and simultaneously a deity of the underworld, from where he seemed to get his knowledge."

    "He seems to have been responsible for the protection of cities or regions it seems people or priests sleeping in his temple, after some rights..."

    Should be: "regions; it". If you want to remove the repetition of "seems", which is used a lot in the description, then you could replace the "it seems" with "apparently" or "allegedly" or something of that kind.

    "were visited by the god in their dreams, who gave them advice or insight into their future."
    This probably ought to be "advice or insights about their future".

    "This sugests the use of hallucinogenic substances in the religious habits of the Lusitanians."
    "suggests", not "sugests" and habits should be replaced by either "rites" or "practices".

    "It was worshipped". I think it should be "he was worshipped". "all different social stratus". Should either be "status" or "strata". Also, I would probably use "widely varying" (if it's meant to be 'status') instead of "all different".

    "indigenous, slaves, eastern populations and the rulling classes which might have helped..."

    "indigenous people", rather than just "indigenous". Who are the 'eastern populations', does this mean east of the Guadiana or eastern as in 'from the middle/far east'?. Also, should be "ruling" rather than "rulling" and the "classes which" needs a comma ("classes, which").

    More to follow

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    Last edited by Teleklos Archelaou; 05-31-2007 at 22:29.


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