Quote Originally Posted by Innocentius
I'll just steal Rodion Romanovich's concept of asking the readers more precise questions, since there's no spontaneous comments on the story:
Focus on views.

1. Is there something with my language that bothers you/makes the story unreadable? I'm not a native speaker, so any help is appreciated.

Ja, occasionally you use the wrong tense and a couple other things. I'm a bit of a language geek and enjoy it though.

2. Is the lack of continuity and plot a good or a bad thing? Why/why not?

It's annoying but if it's a part of your style, stay consistent with your, err, inconsistencies. Each writer should have their preferred style.

3. Is the lack of morality among the characters (especially Peter) something bothersome?

Sweden you say? There are no atheists in foxholes because war is hell (therefore heaven must exist, right?). It's not uncommon for men to loose their faith when fighting a war (especially one like the 30 years war).

4. Do you feel that you can sympathize with any character? Who and why?

I hope not, but fear I can.

5. Would you like more focus on actual fighting?

Focus on your strengths. Ask yourself that question.

6. I try to include the horrible reality of war in the story, is this a good thing or a bad thing? Too graphic? Too repetative?

Refer to 5.