Quote Originally Posted by name
  • Calling the city Roma breaks the style, it sounds stupid mixed into English.
  • Where does one say "finding new enemies"?
  • And yes I know, the script is not the best, but try mentioning all of the things you said in a short video.
  • And well, it was just a try, I trained my video editing skills a bit and if it's not liked then, whatever.
  • Ah btw, Mars is mentioned twice, Jupiter once

Anyway I think I'm gonna drop the thing as I don't see it leading anywhere...

Good day.
You've missed my point. You focused on the strategic situation but you haven't said very much about the Romani, who they are, what drives them.