With both of the voices it sounds you're putting the accent (klemtoon in dutch) in some lines wrong

i'm not meaning the german, american, russia, chinese accent or what ever it's very hard to explain that in words maybe it's better to call it the tone of some words

try to talk a little bit from you're throat like you have a deeper voices and slower with a tone that you really mean

like you said "the enemy's of rome"

should be "the enemy's of rome"

(how bigger the letters how harder you say it)

i hope this is helpful it's so hard to explain and i'm so bad in technical english

anyway i'm impressed by the video i did video edithing myself before there were digital camara's so i know that you guys have invested a lot time in it

maybe we will get a competition of video intro's in the future a few things more and EB can make game box and put in the computer stores