The Alternate World War One

[Monk]

Very interesting! Still haven't gotten over the entire story (there's an aweful lot here..) but so far I'm rather enjoying it.

I do have some pointers though, first and foremost I highly suggest picking up a program like MS word (i know, i say this a lot around here. I'm a broken record so sue me!) since it can actually spot grammatical errors for you and help you clean up your paragraphs a lot nicer. Keeping the readers' eyes moving and flowing smoothly from page to page is a secret that is held in good grammar and spelling (well along with a really good story too ), programs akin to ms word can really help in that regard.

Still, even with the trip ups that i've spotted it doesn't detract a great deal from the whole. I'm looking forward to reading more!