Firstly a well done is in order for breaking the two-hundred view mark, DA. For your hard work your thread gets one of those fancy red envelopes!

Now onto the story. I know when no one comments can be tough but we're doing our best here. Traffic is low.

Still! I am enjoying your story, it's a different shade of what I've come to expect from these parts and hope to see it continued, remember not to get lost in detail and as I said before let the plot flow and tell itself. So far it's been quite a read.