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Del Arroyo
01-19-2007, 05:51
Thank you :bow:

Del Arroyo
01-19-2007, 05:56
These are the first few sections of a story I have written recently. If you would like to read more, please say so and I will post further sections. Of course I am very interested to read any comments or ideas you may have.

:bow:

Ludens
01-20-2007, 13:19
Intriguing. The story appears to lack an purpose, but I take it that's the intention. I would like to read more.

Del Arroyo
01-23-2007, 17:02
Intriguing. The story appears to lack an purpose, but I take it that's the intention. I would like to read more.

Thank you for your comments. Here is some more. :bow:

Ludens
01-27-2007, 16:04
Sorry for the delay: I only just now got a chance to properly read up on your story. It is well-written, the plot sounds real and I like the sparse description, but it is very, very slow by Mead Hall standards. I guess that would explain the lack of comments: this is basically a fanfiction forum so we aren't used to slow, reflective stories. I don't want to discourage you from writing as this definitly shows promise, but totalwar.org may not be the right site to publish it.

Del Arroyo
02-07-2007, 01:22
Does anyone have any comments or ideas? I still have the final section to post, if anyone were interested; though Ludens may be correct, that this may not be the right forum for this kind of piece.

Ludens
02-07-2007, 20:20
Does anyone have any comments or ideas? I still have the final section to post, if anyone were interested; though Ludens may be correct, that this may not be the right forum for this kind of piece.
I am interested, though don't expect any in-depth comments from me.