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    Default My first real attempt at poetry, and my response to The Road Not Taken by R. Frost.

    The left one chews mouth.
    A snowflake descends and dies away elsewhere.
    I mouthchew, nothing happens if I stop.
    There's a walrus there, walrusing on the road.
    The walrus is gone.

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    Default Re: My first real attempt at poetry, and my response to The Road Not Taken by R. Fros

    Gonna need a little help

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    I like it. Walrusing...XD
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    DAMNIT, I hate it when I just don't get it. You can't do that to me. Start explaining.

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    I like it. Walrusing...XD
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    The snowflake represents the life of the walrus, which has passed away. His life much like that of a snowflake, brief and fleeting. I don't know what the chewing mouth represents however. Perhaps the contemplation of death, whether which to take him or not.
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    drug usage is bad
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    Chewing mouth chews coca leaf...
    Walrusing in an intoxication...
    Gone is rational conciousness...
    heart beats...
    slower and slower...
    death-
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    Quote Originally Posted by A Nerd View Post
    Chewing mouth chews coca leaf...
    but nothing happens when he stops....

    I propose that everything is a hallucination, and robert frost is huddled underneath a table
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    The intoxication provides the chewing when the mind is no longer aware of any chewing. To chew or not to chew, that is the question!
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    Quote Originally Posted by A Nerd View Post
    The intoxication provides the chewing when the mind is no longer aware of any chewing. To chew or not to chew, that is the question!
    *response I am too lazy to make
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    Default Re: My first real attempt at poetry, and my response to The Road Not Taken by R. Fros

    I shall walrus in the road till you can provide one. Then I shall chicken across it to meet your response.


    edit: Had to complete my thought. My God, it's full of stars!
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    the question is, rather, whether we count the chewing of the mind. He specifically said mouthchew.
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    Yes, but in order for the mouth to chew, the mind must think it first. Mind chew would have made no sense, but in essence, that is what is at the root of mouth chew. In the poem, mouth chew elludes to mind chew which is affected by mouth chew yeilding the walrus intoxication and non existance.
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    But the mouth still needs to chew. The mind chewing does nothing to intoxicate on its own.
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    I suppose. But we must assume in the poem that the intoxication and the non existance is a given. Therefore, the mind told the mouth to chew, it chewed, and the the intoxication/non existance was realized. In order for the mouth not to chew, the poem would have to be re written and the walrus would still be walrusing on the road and would not dissappear.
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    I think that somewhere out there in the hallucinatory abyss, a nerd is high on crack.

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    Oh populus, you have such a way with words! :) But really, poems are like hallucinations of the writer. The words provide the intoxication that others may read and experience without the detrimental effects of toxins and there inevitable side effects.
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    Default Re: My first real attempt at poetry, and my response to The Road Not Taken by R. Fros

    Are you a poet?

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    In a past life, in a fantasy, in a delusion that I actually have some talent in writing it! :)
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    I enjoyed the OP. Very nice.
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