Great story! Really, I was bored and started reading aars i didn't read yet, (I read all of them, just not at the same time) and you have an awesome story. Although, I will ask you one favor, please make your paragraphs a bit shorter. It makes reading a text heavy aar a lot easier. I do like how much your role playing with this though. I personally liked the fire scene. Very cool. Keep this up, its gonna be a work of art some day.